The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/06
This is great--the message is obvious, but not preachy, and you clinched it at the end with the Scripture, just in case someone failed to make the connection. My only suggestion would be to work on minimizing words like repilied, inquired, asked, and replace them with short descriptive passages. Wonderful illustration of gospel truth!
I agree with everything Jan told you. This is a well written piece. Super connection with the Scripture at the end.
05/25/06
Congratulations on writing this winning entry! This is quite an interesting take on the prosperity topic. God bless your writing!
05/25/06
What a great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. You grabbed my attention from the very first sentence and I was very satisfied with the end. Great job and congrats on being highly commended.
Excellent parable! A well-deserved place among the top five...Congratulations and keep writing!