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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Prosperity (05/11/06)

TITLE: For Better Or Worse
By Edy T Johnson
05/13/06


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For Better Or Worse

There is nothing so annoying, when Iím mad as a wet hen, than to have a husband grinning , as if Iím joking! He just stares at me, until he can no longer restrain himself. A little smile gets past his resolve and his stifled chuckling begins to explode into his funny laugh, while my squawking goes into crescendo fortissimo.

Iíve always had a short fuse. Iím usually not one to simmer and stew. I blow up, but itís quickly over. But, that sudden flare sends alarms even to me. Then Iím meek, I canít believe I lost it again, and Iím sorry as can be.

I believe in being honest about my feelings. I donít hide the abundance of my emotions. Iím transparent to a fault, itís just the way I am. If I love you, youíll know it! [If I canít stand you, Iíll stay away.] No mystery about it, what you see is what you get! But, I keep trying to be better.

When I was a teenager, my mom told me I needed to learn to be more mysterious (like she was, and like my younger sister, she said)! She actually told me, ďNobody ever has to wonder whatís going on inside YOUR head. Itís always written all over your face! Youíre as plain as an old meatball!Ē

Well, that was a startling assessment. I said nothing, but I already had it figured out that she was wrong. Folks need to know somebody loves them, or somebody is angry with them. Or, whatever. I never was one to play games, like some sneaky women. Probably why marriage dangled just out of my reach all those yearning years. It sure was beyond my doing when I beat the odds for somebody in my age bracket finally getting married for the first time. My sweetheart was so delighted to find me, so thankful in his widowhood that he wouldnít have to spend the rest of his life alone, after all, that he was, thankfully, oblivious to all my faults. Without that type of blindness, Iím afraid Iíd still be single. Or, horrors! married in misery.

So, how did I finally find the one who would, with all his earthly goods, me endow? How did a crab like me get a man so sweet and mild? Heís only raised his voice a couple times in all the years weíve been married, although I certainly would have thought I deserved his wrath a lot more often. Instead, the big teddy bear just leaves for awhile. When I settle down and call him, he claims he checked out because he was scared of me! Isnít that just awful? I donít want to be scary! Iíd much rather be sweet and serene!

Well, I didnít ďfindĒ him, and I didnít ďgetĒ him. I finally gave up, having barked up too many wrong trees over the years. And then, SURPRISE! God had something up His sleeve, after all, and I could hardly believe my good fortune. What a jewel, what a gift He gave me when I allowed Him to do the picking!

Someday, Iíll have to write a poem for my husband. Iíll confess all the above in rhyming, metered lines, just for him. And, Iíll have to end it with the words:
ďSo, whatís the moral of this verse?
I got you for Better, and you got me for Worse!Ē


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Jan Ackerson 05/18/06
I laughed out loud at "...as plain as an old meatball." This is delightful.
Lynda Schultz 05/19/06
They do say that opposites attract! Great writing.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/21/06
This is a wonderfully transparent potrayal of yourself. I really enjoyed it. Especially your poem: ďSo, whatís the moral of this verse?
I got you for Better, and you got me for Worse!Ē

Watch your punctuation. You are a good writer and you have a wonderful voice. With a little tightening this would be a gem.
Pat Guy 05/24/06
This is an absolute delight! The poem rendition would be most interesting!

'...while my squawking goes into crescendo fortissimo.' Perfect - besides your perfect ending! Loved this!
Joe Moreland05/25/06
What a personal portrayal of yourself. I love how you freely acknowledge your "faults" without beating yourself up over them. We all have faults, but very few of us accept as a part of who we are. What you reveal to us is that our "faults" are only the perceptions of others as they see us through their own particular filtered vision. God sent you someone with the ideal vision to see you for who you really are. Anyway, that's what I got out of your story. :>) Great job!
Sherry Wendling05/26/06
Edy, I feel as though I know you! This piece is a treasure. Your figures of speech just sing. I sure can identify with the mystery of The Match, especially later in life. God sure does have a sense of humor!

Just a suggestion for turbo-charging your opening sentence. Why not start out with "madder than a wet hen?" It just seems easier for the reader to follow if you keep the actions in their chronological sequence.

But that's only a nitpick...the whole thing is delightful, and I do hope you employ your rare gifting to create the poem!
Valora Otis05/27/06
Edy, I feel like I've known you for years! We are two of a kind, you and I, right down to the men we have married! Oh, and I have two sisters, just like yours! This pulled me into your story, realizing that I'm not the only one who does these things! Your story was so well written. You have the heart of a Minnesotan my friend. So glad that you found someone who appreciates you for who you are! Sorry, I'm gushing, but I just loved it!!!!!!
Rev. Toni Brown05/27/06
I like this writing and cna totally relate to it! God is so good...He knows what we need.
Edy T Johnson 05/30/06
You are all so kind! Thank you for your comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed this page of my "true confessions!" God bless all of you!
Marilyn Schnepp 09/24/06
The very first line lured me in! - because I also hate it when I'm fit to be tied and they LAUGH! Loved your "True Confession", it's good for the soul, and it's also nice to know there are others that share your same old flaws. (Ahem!) Great Story, Loved it throughout! Kudos, My Friend! Kudos.
terri tiffany10/12/06
Wonderful story!! You sound like a delightful person who knows herself well!:)
Joanney Uthe02/04/08
Edy, this was delightful and insightful. I can just picture Howard bursting out laughing when you are mad. I love your transparency, your honesty. This is very good, but I can see how your writing has improved since writing this. You are a blessing, my friend.
Carol Penhorwood 11/09/09
Absolutely delightful and so honest! Truly enjoyable!