The Official Writing Challenge
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I really like the promise in the last paragraph! A few little edits here and there for missed words and other minor corrections, but this is a very pleasant story, with a realistic voice and a compelling character.
Liked the story. Tense change in the 4th para. threw me a little. Sounds like it could be a longer story. Good work.
Nice imagery in the first half of the story. A few grammatical and spelling changes needed, but overall a very thoughtful and encouraging story.
This is pretty good. It could use a little tweeking, but overall it's a keeper.
I liked the premise, the storyline and the message of hope and prosperity. Just a little tweaking and tightening and a keener eye on spelling, grammar, etc. and it's good to go! Really nice job!
I like the story and the imagery. As others have said, it could have used a little tightening. Good job.
You are a master at character development! I love how easy it is to get to know your characters and to really feel like we're in the situation with them. Great job!
Strong characterization, message right on target, good job!
You have a knack for pulling your reader right into the midst of the action. This has such a nice flow to the narration. God bless your writing!
Sweet ending with lots of hope.
Cute, engaging story. I agree with Anita. You are FULL of people, characters, the way they interact, the rhythm and flow of communication. Have you ever tried your hand at drama?