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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hope (05/04/06)

By Genstacia Bull


Kate looked compassionately at the distraught young lady who sat on the opposite side of her desk. She handed her a tissue and told her it was okay to cry. Kate glanced at her file again and was amazed at the similarities between this lady and who she was thirty years ago. Career issues, financial stress, and self esteem difficulties.

Kate pushed her glasses up the bridge of her nose. Her baby pink suit with fawn shirt gave her a soft look. Her office was cosy with plush cream carpet and smelt of rose potpourri. Kate smiled as Yvonne let out a loud sigh.

“Ready” Kate asked in a soothing tone.

Yvonne nodded.

Kate listened patiently as Yvonne poured out her soul, she was tentative when she started but when she saw no sign of judgement or disapproval from Kate she continued and let it all out. Kate was good at her job; apart from that she knew it all too well because she had been there. Apart from her tear filled eyes Yvonne’s appearance could grace the cover of any magazine. She was not just a pretty face she was also intelligent yet she did not like herself. Kate understood because she remembered like it was yesterday when she use to wear masks, appear as hard as nails when what she really wanted was a hug.

“Yvonne, you are going to be all right.” Kate asserted

“That is easy for you to say, everything in your life is perfect.”

“I know that because I have experienced everything you are going through now. Besides Yvonne; you have to make a decision to be happy even when things are not perfect because life isn’t”

Yvonne looked bemused “Huh?”

“Stop trying to be perfect, relax and enjoy who you were created you to be even with your weaknesses.”

Yvonne tilted her head and scratched the nape of her neck. Her eyes glazed over she bolted upright.

“I like what that framework says”

Kate had several scriptures in pretty frames all over her office. She wondered which one she was referred to.

“It says for I know the plans I have for you, declares the Lord, plans to prosper you and not to harm you, plans to give you hope and a future, I know I will be alright. “

Kate smiled and was amazed at the variety of ways God healed people in her office.

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dub W05/12/06
Nice, well composed, visual. Watch pronoun confusion.
Sally Hanan05/13/06
This was a good way to get accross your message of what perfection is not.
I think this would have been better written from Yvonne's point of view, as then you could have described Kate's clothes and office as she saw them. In a story, try not to state facts, rather let the reader discover them through a character.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/14/06
This is good. Watch your grammar and be carful not to be too redundant with your words, like: "apart from". It takes away from the smooth flow of your story when you do. Great job.
Trina Courtenay05/16/06
Read your work backwards or from bottom up. This will help you catch your typo's, punctuation mistakes and any extra words typed by mistake. Also use bold or italicize to quote. It really packs the extra punch. (Just incase you don't know how to when submitting use, at the begining of quote and at the end to italicize and , for bold.
Trina Courtenay05/16/06
Sorry, don't know what happened there. I'll try again, Italicize and Bold. Hope this helps.

Trina Courtenay05/16/06
One more try...oh pm me or better yet I believe you'll find the answer in the FAQ of the site. Sorry about all of that. I just know from experience that I've been left advice without instructions on how to change it.