The Official Writing Challenge
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05/12/06
Pretty nice open free verse. You might think of keeping the key lead word to each stanza as a single noun, I think that would make it stronger.
05/13/06
While I understand what you tried to do, it seems too hard to follow. When you have many verses it helps to have them all have the same number of lines. Because this poem is personal, putting yourself into it would have helped more too, e.g.Prayer
I fall into His grace
and begin to pray within His will.
His powerful Spirit
moves beyond my limited imagination
into action
His miracles become visible