The Official Writing Challenge
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05/11/06
Powerful. Very powerful, but I have to wonder if its too late for this hope.
05/12/06
Interesting, a lot of loose ends left untied, too many in fact to be just mysterious. The present tense bothered me, but that's a personal thing. I did like the parallel to the table - nice touch.
This was rather confusing and hard to keep track of, but overall it was well written. Your dialogue was done well, and I did like the parallel with the table also.