The Official Writing Challenge
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05/11/06
Yeah, this is pretty good stuff, enjoyed the read.
05/12/06
I'm waiting for the sequel. Good job.
Great story. I loved your characters, they were very believeable. Thanks!
05/13/06
I loved it! Loved how you distinguished the characters by their dialogue and actions. Great job!
Why are you in Intermediate? You are an Advanced writer!WOW. Your stroy flowed so smoothly, had a great message, your descriptions were right on and the plot was perfect. I found a few errors, but nothing major. Be proud of this one!
I like the concept (young kid winning older uncle) and the characters drew me right in. Not sure how an editor would feel about your sudden change of POV at the tail end, but it kinda grabbed me. Good work!