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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)

TITLE: Even Me
By Brandi Roberts
05/03/06


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The three insignificant words rolled off of her tongue and into my ears. Love? I could hardly fathom her even knowing the meaning of the word. Through all my adolescent years, all I ever heard was the incessant nagging of a weak woman drawn into fear by a distant god.

Sentences like "You need to come to church." followed by "You need to find some good Christian friends." only served to fuel my anger. I wasn't weak-minded like her. I had no need for a higher power.

"You're hardly one to talk about love. All these years you've just antagonized me with your pitiful attempts to appease a god who doesn't even care." I spat at her, hoping to see her cringe. "You think He loves you? What have you done to deserve it?"

A swift cloud of darkness swept over her expression. "Absolutely nothing." Her quiet words shot like electricity through my spine. Intrigue replaced the anger seething through my grinding molars.

"Nothing, eh? So why would He love you then?" My stare penetrated hers.

"Because He loves everyone. You've heard it before..." She paused. "God so loved the world..."

I cut her off with my hand. "Yadda, yadda, yadda. John three, sixteen. They're meaningless words, Mother, written by fools." The words had just slipped past my lips when I felt the sting of her slap across my face.

"As much as I love you, I will not allow you to talk in such a manner!" She retrieved her Bible from the lampstand beside us and shoved it at me, forcing it into my chest. "Read it, and if you still believe it was written by fools, I'll never bother you again with my nonsense." Her words spiked me, challenging me.

I grasped the heavily read book in my palm and, brushing past my mother, escaped into the darkness of my room.

***


Over a month had passed since our last confrontation, and neither of us had spoken much to one another in that time, when I finally approached my mother and handed the well-worn book to her.

"I read it." The mumbled words took a moment to register in her mind.

She looked at me, questioningly. "All of it? It's barely been a month since..." Her words faded into the shadows.

I shrugged. "I had a lot of extra time on my hands."

"And?" The single word held so much expectation. How could I tell her she was right? How could I admit that all my prideful boasting was nothing more than ignorant words from an even more ignorant child?

"He loves you." The words escaped my lips and my arms came up and crossed in front of me - my protection.

"That's right." She stood from the chair she'd been resting in and wrapped her arms around me. "He loves you too, you know."

"I know." I shook from the confession. "I'm sorry, Mom." The fluid sorrow seeped past my eyelids and onto my cheeks. God loved the world... even me.


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Amy Michelle Wiley 05/04/06
Well done! You did the change in attitude without being mushy and unrealistic. Great story.
Pat Guy 05/04/06
'"He loves you." The words escaped my lips and my arms came up and crossed in front of me - my protection.' My favorite part! So like, so many!

Great angle on love without being preachy. Great dialogue and attitudes. You put us there at the scene. Really good stuff here! :)
terri tiffany05/06/06
This was great! Good opening paragraph, good twist on the characters and great ending. You showed with good word choices. Very nicely done!
Sue Dent05/06/06
How does that line go, Love is a battefield. But ahhhh, sweet victory! So real, the defiance of youth. So amazing, the persistance of a mother's love. I think I'll go hug my daughter now. Great job!
Virginia Gorg05/08/06
If only we could get everyone to read the Bible cover to cover, and allow God to speak to their hearts. Very nicely done, flows well, and speaks volumes. :)
Christopher Randolph05/09/06
And He loves even me. Thank you for the excellent reminder. This reminds me of a song. How does it go? "Jesus loves me, this I know..." Like the song, your story is simple yet packed with meaning. I like that.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/09/06
Good job. I agree that you did the change of heart well. You didn't do a Pollyanna 180, it was a realistic turn.
Jesus Puppy 05/09/06
So often do we come across those who chose to disbelieve. The love we show that God places in our heart, and still condemn His love. We then never learn, if not for the we placed in our own live by the Lord, we would be as cold as the rest of the world. You have done a good job showing the turn around of this one child, I pray other would find HIS love as easy. Good job sis.
Rita Garcia05/09/06
You painted a beautiful picture of His love. Great job!
Val Clark05/09/06
We are so different when we look at life through God's perspective. Liked the very real portrayal of your character's emotions - both mother and daughter. Any particular reason why God is mostly small 'g' but He is a capital 'h'? Yeggy