The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
Yeah, powerful message, well told
04/28/06
Well written, love the way you wove the message through your story. Blessings
04/29/06
Wow, I thought this was going in one direction, and you took me in another direction altogether! Good for you! Your writing will have a smoother flow if you work on sentence structure (specifically, run-ons) and punctuation a bit. Wonderful imagery here; I could see and hear the scene perfectly.
Wow. I wasn't quite sure where this was going and you surprised me with the ending. Well done.