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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Inner Strength (04/20/06)

TITLE: A fool's regret
By Kirralie Smith


The book lay open on the large table. It was impressive; a pure, white leather cover with gold leaf pages. The thought entered Kevin’s mind that he wouldn’t even be able to lift it off the table it was so huge, in fact, ten men couldn’t lift it off the table.

A hush had fallen over the stadium full of people that surrounded him. They were even more impressive than the white leather and gold book. Every pair of eyes were firmly fixed on him. Every pair of eyes penetrated into Kevin’s soul. He became acutely aware of all of his short comings in an instant. Can they see me he thought to himself? He was referring to his life, his thoughts, his ugly past. Kevin began to tremble as a tangible expectation of something great and terrible arose around him.

He had never felt so exposed in all of his life, or so nervous. Or so excited for that matter. What is going on? The crowd of witnesses in the stadium were magnificent. They radiated a beauty that not even a field of the most glorious wildflowers could rival. Their eyes were sharp and clear, he knew they could see more than just his physical body. Kevin wanted desperately to hide from their revealing gaze but he also had an overwhelming desire to stay, he sensed something amazing was about to happen.

Nothing in his 37years of life could have prepared him for what happened next. An explosion of applause erupted around him that was so wild it only served to intensify the cocktail of emotions that already had a tight grip around his heart.
It was the sight of HIM though in that moment that drove Kevin to his knees.

As the Lord entered the stadium violent praise ripped through every particle of the atmosphere making it submissive to his majesty and glory. The victorious King shone brilliantly, basking in the praise and adoration that flowed from the great crowd. His strength was evident to all and the once impressive looking book now looked like mere ashes compared to the splendour of this King.

Kevin found himself flat on the ground under the weight of such power. Despite having been a successful business man and entrepreneur he felt weak and insignificant now. Regret flooded his being as he suddenly realised who the great crowd worshipped.

“Yeshua!” Kevin’s voice was strained and low as he forced out the acknowledgement.

Silence as violent as the praise now overtook the stadium. Kevin was almost crushed with fear as he raised his head to behold the most beautiful person he could have ever imagined. The strength and power radiating from his being commanded great respect. The fact that he also appeared as a lamb that was slain smashed into Kevin’s being like a fully laden semi trailer. What have I done he thought as panic overtook him. He had always relied on his inner strength to overcome any obstacle but now laying here before the Creator King he realised what a fool he had been. There was no strength within him that could ever satisfy the majesty of Yeshua. He had passed up the invitation to have the Holy Spirit dwell within him years ago, writing it off as a crutch for the weak. How stupid!

As Yeshua took the throne on the other side of the table Kevin sensed a pure stream of love embrace him. He lost himself in the complete bliss of the moment. This is exactly what he had searched for day after day in his miserable existence and now here it was, unadulterated and extravagant in every way. Just being in the very presence of the King was exhilarating!

All of that was shattered with just seven simple words that came from Yeshua’s mouth after looking at the book of life that lay open on the table, “Away from me. I never knew you.”

Agony swept over Kevin as he was wrenched from the presence of God. Pain, torment and unquenchable thirst attacked every fibre of his being. The sores on his skin and the weeping and gnashing of teeth was horrendous, but the greatest source of pain came from the fact he had relied on his inner strength all of his life instead of surrendering to the all consuming love of the Father God.

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Helen Paynter04/27/06
Yeah, powerful message, well told
Rita Garcia04/28/06
Well written, love the way you wove the message through your story. Blessings
Jan Ackerson 04/29/06
Wow, I thought this was going in one direction, and you took me in another direction altogether! Good for you! Your writing will have a smoother flow if you work on sentence structure (specifically, run-ons) and punctuation a bit. Wonderful imagery here; I could see and hear the scene perfectly.
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/30/06
Wow. I wasn't quite sure where this was going and you surprised me with the ending. Well done.