The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
Interesting story, but it left lots of questions unanswered. Intriguing...
04/29/06
Intriguing mystery--how did she get there? Work on making dialog sound more realistic, and giving your characters more distinct personalities. The plot was good; I wish you'd had more words to expand and clarify it.