The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
You have brought this biblical account to life, and I commend you as your writing drew me into this story like never before. This is the first time going into the intermediate stories, and I'm so happy I read yours first.

I'm a beginner and I love to write, so I need to tell you one thing, I couldn't stop reading your story, it captivated me. Thank you for enlightening me and opened my eyes as how a story should be told, it was a learning experience for me. God bless you as you continue with your writing. Perhaps you would critique my entry. It's under Beginner - and the name is Reflection.
04/27/06
You brought energy to this Biblical story, I felt each emotion of Hadara. Then I was drawn to experience the mercy and grace of our Lord.
Brilliantly written!
Peace & Joy, Rita
04/27/06
Story well told. You drew me in. My only niggle was the last line, which ... I don't know, bothered me slightly. Not that I'm into neat endings...so, probably best to ignore my rambling...lol
04/29/06
The sound of the stones echoing her heart...perfect. This is beautiful writing.
04/30/06
This is compelling writing. Your character was very clearly defined and portrayed. I enjoyed the personal look into a familiar Biblical character. Very well done!
05/01/06
I was totally captivated until that last line. As someone else commented, it left me hanging, bothered, as though Jesus sent her away without providing what she needed to do what He had asked her to do - which is out of character for Him. But, all in all, this was very good. Congratulations.
05/01/06
This is a wonderful re-telling of this bible story - the woman caught in adultery is brought fully to life, her conflicting emotions of shame and fear well portrayed. I have to say I too was a little bothered by that last line - but otherwise this was really nicely done. God bless.
05/03/06
Awesome entry! Very compelling!
05/04/06
This is well written, but one comment. In the account (in John), Jesus was "bent down as the stones dropped to the ground. He then straightend and looked at the woman." As others have commented, the last line seems a bit weak. But I like the retelling of the story and the personality you gave the woman.