The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
I won't pretend to know anything about poetry, so I have not critique or anything. I really liked this, thanks for sharing!
04/13/06
I especially like your4th stanza: "It leaks!" Very good!

A bit more work on rhythm and meter would really polish up this little gem.
04/13/06
Good sentiments. Have a little look at your scanning and see if you can tighten it up. Thank you for sharing it
04/15/06
It wouldn't take much to make this poem flow beautifully; for instance..
"Life is full of questions
Yet the answers are so few", etc, etc;...just the lack of rhythm can make a Great poem only average. Keep up the good work! Perfection comes with practice. God Bless.