The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story. Thanks for sharing it. You have a knack for dialog, it flowed very nicely. Thanks again!
Some really nice details: the imprint of the wedding ring, the picture on the mantle. I was glad, too, that you didn't give us the "pretty" ending. This is very well done.
I like this because it is realistic, unexpected, and not 'pat' (don't like'pat')
I don't think any one of us could say the 'real world' of today hasn't found its way inside the walls of our lives. There is so much pain and suffering, trials and tribulations that are so unfortunately being endured privately. You captured a very real circumstance and ended with the only conclusion that makes any sense ... 'my help comes from the Lord'(Ps 121:2). Amen. Good work.
You did a really good job of portraying reality,one's faith may not always change it and can sometimes make things more difficult. I liked that she kept her faith anyway and let it carry her through the rocky terrain. Not the 'happily ever after ending I thought was coming, so the twist was great.
Well written story. Good job.
I want the happy ending! I thought for a moment the "someone" he met was Jesus. Oh, life stinks sometimes. This story is real - painfully real and very well-written.
And isn't this just like the world..... I like the nice happy endings, but they're a bit story-bookish sometimes - yours is real. Well done.