The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
I love your 3rd paragraph, and the prayer at the end. The 2nd paragraph has some pronoun issues, because of the trickiness of written English. For example, you have an "individual" seeing "themselves", and "one" can look back on "their" life. I'm sure your were trying to avoid using he/she...it's a terrible language, isn't it? Consider writing it in first person ("I"), and then giving the application to your readers in the end.
04/13/06
I agree with what Jan said. I also loved the 3rd paragraph and then the prayer. Great message, thanks for sharing!
04/13/06
A helpful devotional. I'd be inclined to split the long paragraph for the sake of readability, but liked the content
Well-written. I really enjoyed this necessary reminder! Thank you!