The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
Loved the opening and closing paragraphs, and thought the story was funny and quirky. My only complaint is that of credibility - how can someone love the Lord and it not become clear over 40 years to an intimate acquaintance?
04/13/06
I love the "frame" of this piece, the 40-year conversation bobbling on the wind. Fun dialect, original idea. Thanks a bunch!
04/13/06
Another comment on credibility. If Joshua graduated from university, his language skills would be better even if he still retained, or lapsed back into, his "local" accent. But other than those two details, it is an excellent piece of writing.
I like the story. I agree with the credibility comments, but this is a good story overall.