The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
Good message, although I don't agree with this sentence (or perhaps don't understand it): 'And let's reward ourselves now for our spiritual accomplishments at least. '
But I think it would be better if it was broken up a bit, expanded with some illustrations or just lightened slightly. As it is, it's a bit densely packed with gems!
04/13/06
Perhaps a bit too much fulfillment here; it shows up in every sentence. Your writing will sparkle more if you come up with alternative words. Some nice encouragement, and a Happy Easter to you, too!