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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: Not To Me?
By Purity Snowe
04/06/06


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I fall into the shadows
Blending with graffiti on the fouled alley walls.
Iím shouting, too. One discordant note in a shrieking din.
Meth, blow, crank. They taunt me.
Iíve become meaningless, chained to a squalid mattress.
Willfully violated.
Blessed are the pure.
And what of me? What of me?

Iím lost, afraid. Come find me, Lord.
My soul longs for fulfillment.
Let there be rejoicing in the presence of your angels this day.


I cry in the darkness.
Blood dripping from my swollen lip, my blackened eye.
Iím hurting. Twisted every way in frantic distress.
This is my own doingÖ abandoned by self.
Iíve become a vapor. Without merit, substance.
Inconsequential
Let she who is without sinÖ
Thatís not me. Thatís not me.

Iím desperate, seeking. Come help me, Lord.
My spirit longs for fulfillment.
Let there be rejoicing in heaven over me this day.


Iíve met you before.
You, in that polished car and church clothes.
I watched your wife buying truffles as you propositioned me.
Iím worth more than twenty bucks.
Or at least I thought so.
Donít you understand anything?
Go unto all the worldÖ
But not to me? Not to me.

Iím suffering, disillusioned. What happened, Lord?
My heart cries for fulfillment.
Leave the others, light your lamp. Seek me once again this day.



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Helen Paynter04/13/06
This is great - prophetic edge and really good writing. Love the 2nd line
Lynda Schultz 04/13/06
This reminds me, of all things, of Ezekiel 22 ó a world in ruins and God says: "I looked for a man among them who would build up the wall and stand before me in the gap on behalf of the land so I would not have to destroy it, BUT I FOUND NONE". Such despair. More than a reminder, a rebuke and well done.
Alexandra Wilkin04/13/06
Strong, vivid, powerful... the voice of 'the least of these' brought passionately to life. There is no skirting around the issues here - for the least of these life is dark, squalid, violent. Will I turn my face from it tomorrow, or will I ask Him to help me bring His light into the darkest of places? Bless you for this - very, very good.
Jan Ackerson 04/13/06
Wow! Powerful, powerful, powerful. I love your narrator's response to the little snippets of scripture. Very moving, one of the best for this week, in my opinion.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/14/06
This poetic prose reminds me of Ez.34:16...where God says "I will search for the lost and bring back the strays... bind up the injured and strengthen the weak. I, Myself, will tend my sheep and have them lie down"...in green pastures. Yes, this "Not To Me" is a touching, moving story of the ones who have lost their way. Nice job. Well done.
Crista Darr04/15/06
Strong, gripping piece of writing. Well done.
Ann Darcy04/18/06
Very strong, Purity! I don't think you have anything to worry about!
T. F. Chezum04/18/06
Very powerful & well written. Great job.
Pat Guy 04/19/06
Wow! I loved this! Great writing! Soooo gooood!
Carla Feagans04/19/06
This was chilling and so very well-written. Bravo! Well done. Very very good. I loved the line "willfully violated" - so simple, yet so profound.
Helen Paynter04/20/06
very well-deserved win
Doug Jenkins04/20/06
"Iím worth more than twenty bucks.
Or at least I thought so."

Excellent piece of writing! It is good to look through the eyes of one on the other side.

Doug
Debbie OConnor04/20/06
Breathtaking. Thank you so much. This is powerful, beautiful, convicting writing. Congratulations!
janet rubin04/24/06
Big congrats to you purity! I took a week off from the challenge, but saw your name on the winner's list and had to check this out. Heavy, emotional, thought-provoking and convicting. Keep up the good work.