The Official Writing Challenge
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This is really excellent writing - a compelling story told with sensitivity. Good job.
I agree with the above comment. Beautiful and touching. So very true and sad. Great job of telling it.
This is very good! I think you should start with your third paragraph--not many people need to look up "lock" in the dictionary, and you did a very good job of describing her locked heart later in the story. I like the hopeful ending.
Great writing - got to be a strong contender
I had to read this twice to realize Rob and "her fiancee" were the same person .. right? You don't need to define lock as you gave a wonderful description in describing her heart.