The Official Writing Challenge
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Sapces, spaces spaces!!! Please break up your story by using numerous paragraphs. Many people won't read this wonderful story, due to this very fact. You have great potential. Keep it up!
YOu wrote a very powerful story and spaces as said before will help with the delivery of that to others. I think you have good writing skills and am excited to see more that you will write! Oh, the last attic word is misspelled...:) Happens to me all the time after I post I catch a ton of them!! Thanks!:)
Some strong emotions here, portrayed well. Take care with sentence structure and spelling, and your pieces will be even more readable. Nice memories...
"What was written on this lock couldn’t have ministered to me stronger than what was written." I didn't quite get this sentence. I really like your voice in this. Your emotions came across well.