The Official Writing Challenge
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02/21/05
This had an interesting beginning and was on topic. However, it was a little difficult to read because of the changing verb tenses from present to past and some spelling and grammar errors. I'm glad grandma shared her cake.
The only confusing part for me was when did she talk to grandma without Ms Watson hearing? Maybe alittle scene setting would help in these last few lines. But what a delightful story! I loved the way the character found these old pieces, making the reader wonder about the story behind them too! I could see this expanded into a complete article story!