The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow. What an "in your face" story. You're very right. I would've liked to have seen some dialogue between God and the man or even the man to himself. A powerful messege!
03/15/06
Great cautionary tale. MIght have been better if you'd ended with the sentence about the door to heaven not being locked--more impact there, and when you've told your story well, you don't need to hit 'em with it again. Poor dude.
Good way to show that we all do have a choice.
03/16/06
Great message. May I suggest you use more punctuation, especially commas? Thank you for writing it.