The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
Shades of Screwtape Letters. Good job.
I liked how you set up the back and forth between the two scenes, but when you wrote the meeting scenes, the quotes around words were a bit distracting. Maybe italics would show the stress, but blend more?

“I was assigned to Kevin, Cori’s wife." Uh, I think you meant husband. ;) hehehe
Good job though!
03/15/06
Very, very well done.
03/16/06
This is GREAT! (and yes, very reminiscent of Screwtape)
Would love to see you add a scene showing an angelic warrior breaking those chains with a mighty sword!
Very good Jess. Excellent dialogue - seems to be one of your strengths. Two wins in a row might push into level 3.
Excellent! Very good dialogue. Excellent job overall.
03/16/06
Love the theme, love the ending, love the cologne called Seduction LOL
03/17/06
Very well done -nice work going back and forth between their thoughts/actiosn and the spiritual warfare.
Very entertaining and very true all at the same time! Well done!! Great way to bid 'adieu' to intermediate! LOL!
03/19/06
I love the way this concludes - great. And the title is really clever! The whole piece is great - well done!
03/20/06
Congratulations, Jessica!!
03/21/06
Very cleverly done, and a good reminder of how to live each day in my marriage.
03/25/06
Congratulations on your win...very well written!
05/13/06
Hi Jessica,

Congratulations on first place for your article, "The Staff Meeting From Hell".

That was very creative. Did you get the idea from Screwtape Letters? It was a great piece to remind us of the spiritual warfare that is constantly being waged behind the scenes to keep Christians from being effective. But you had a great ending to prove that we have victory through the Lord Jesus Christ as we believe in His power to deliver us.

Sincerely,

Jeffrey Gante