The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/06
What a fascinating twist on Genesis!
I loved the creativeness of this story--especially the mutation of sin. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks
03/10/06
Wow! This was a very good sci-fi approach to the problem of sin and man's self-destructive tendencies. Almost Ray Bradburyish in its thought! I liked it!
'Past' should have been 'passed' each time you used it, and watch your use of the semi-colon (;). Sometimes you should have used a comma or just made a new sentence.
But I enjoyed this! Good work!
03/11/06
I Robot, oops Android, meets Genesis. A unique twist on creation. Very clever and multi layered. Read it again got more out of it. Well done.
Very creative concept. Good story.