The Official Writing Challenge
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It must be a man thing - this inability to just get on with the cooking! The dialogue was good. Be careful with punctuation with direct speech.
Heh...That was a very enjoyable read. It was light and filled with the simple humor of life, and you did a great job connecting it at the end to how we are towards God.
As I read the dialogue I kept thinking there was a word or two missing. There was a misspell or two and the overuse of the word quietly I counted at least 4 or 5 times. However the story was good.
I agree that this was a good story that has a good point! However, I did notice some grammatical errors as well. For example, I think the first sentence in the second paragraph is a run-on sentence. I liked the story though!