The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved the voice in this story. The ending left me hanging abit, and I wished you had left some spaces between paragraphs for an easier read... but again, the author's voice drew me in.
Unique and readable voice. This might flow better if placed in chronological order, and paragraphed. Excellent effort, thanks so much!
This was very dark and sad and I feel for you if it is a slice of your life, but I thought we were to keep things a little lighter on this site. As for a critique your writing down what happen could serve as healing process for you, I hope so.