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02/20/06
A very accurate description of what depression feels like. The repetition of the first paragraph works, too, but put an apostrophe in "crow's cry". And I think leaving the word "though" off the very last sentence would strengthen your ending. All in all, beautifully done, with just enough hope.
02/22/06
The transition when God was talking to you was not clear, but other than that good work.
02/27/06
This was really touching. I'm sure anybody who has struggled similarly can identify strongly with your character. Great writing, and a good choice of title too.