The Official Writing Challenge
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A very accurate description of what depression feels like. The repetition of the first paragraph works, too, but put an apostrophe in "crow's cry". And I think leaving the word "though" off the very last sentence would strengthen your ending. All in all, beautifully done, with just enough hope.
The transition when God was talking to you was not clear, but other than that good work.
This was really touching. I'm sure anybody who has struggled similarly can identify strongly with your character. Great writing, and a good choice of title too.