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02/20/06
This has the potential to be a very powerful piece. There are some issues with inconsistent tenses--fix those and this will really pack a punch.
02/22/06
I desperately tried to understand, as I could sense some beautiful settings, and some powerful incidents, but I have to admit defeat. It was too deep for my shallow mind. But I did read some beautiful scenes, not that I understood them, but this author is a DEEP thinker with a fathomless depth of talent. I shall return to try again, because I think it might be worth my while. Thank you.
02/23/06
Very vivid, poetic -this was great!
02/23/06
This is beautiful, and shows the horribleness, sadness, and gloriousness of that Great Day. You've written this so very well, with just a bit of clean up needed. I loved the tenderness shown by the tears. Absolutely wonderful!
02/23/06
You have painted a wonderfully vivid picture here. My only "complaint"? Many of your "sentences" aren't sentences, but with a little adjusting this would go from good to great. Blessings.
02/23/06
Makes me happy I am on the right side. :o)

Really liked this line:

"A cleansing fire rained down from the heavens, sweeping all things away in a twinkling of an eye. The cries of the vanquished called out in their torment, as the precious One wept for their losses."

Keep writing.
02/23/06
Very powerful! Unfortunately there will be those that the Lord will weep over on that day. All will not accept Him.

02/23/06
Vibrant, visceral imagery; you did a good job avoiding cliche. There were a couple of tense changes and punctuation misses that distracted me a moment. But not for long...well done!
02/23/06
I think this is brilliant! I love the way you showed us the timelessness of God as He views all of history. Your descriptions were powerful and gripping and compelling. GREAT JOB!!!
02/24/06
Great job. Very powerful.
02/25/06
This was beautiful. I was with you up until the end, (no pun intended). I was a little confused about your last sentence. I understand the theology behind the Great Battle , but what did you mean by the replanting? Are you talking about the Great Tribulation happening AFTER the Second Coming? But besides a few difficult phrases (tenses seemed a bit off) I loved it. I love your depth. I can't belive you wrote this in an hour! If I was given 25 hours I don't think I would've come up with such a beuatiful, creative literary masterpeice. This was awesome. I especially loved "waiting to cleanse His creation of the stain the enemy had brought upon it at the hand of Man. For a moment all of creation stood still, as a sad whisper spoke into His heart." those few sentences speak volumns of your talent. Please excuse my spelling mistakes! great job!
03/02/06
Oh, Ed - you were wrong, I liked this piece! Of course I really like all that you write - such talent and what a mind! Very powerful, wonderful insight into Christ's sorrow and a beautiful ending. Nice job!