The Official Writing Challenge
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Please consider working on this some more. You've left your readers wondering who the mysterious guys were, and left out many details of the trip. Is there a lesson you wanted us to learn? You've imagined a tense situation; please develop it. Keep writing!
To make this piece a little more Reader Friendly, I suggest some paragraphing and spacing. Readers are what Writers to ensnare them...make it easy. Thanks for sharing your story.