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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Break (02/06/06)

TITLE: Break It to the Lord in Prayer!
By Marilyn Schnepp
02/09/06


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"Good morning, students!"
Smiled Professor McGhee,
"Now open your textbooks
To page forty-three.

"At the top of the page
Is a five letter word;
Put the meaning in rhythm
Then read it aloud to a nerd.".

-BREAK-

(Linda)...

"You can break someone's heart,
Or break down a door;
But don't be surprised!..
When they even the score!"

(Kenny)...

"When you rack up the balls
You discuss what's at stake;
Then you chalk up your cues
And flip for "Who Breaks".

(Sheri)...:

"When she opens on Broadway
As the Star of the Show..
They say "Break a Leg"...
But Why? ... I don't know!"

(Max)...

"Sir, gimmie a break",
Slurred the drunk to the cop;
"The green light turned pink
Before I could stop!"

(Lucille)...

"When white foamy waves
Break for the shore, ..
They meet with the surf
In a thundering roar!."

(Jake)...

"Help me, dear Lord!
I'm a junkie named Jake.;.
And I'm hooked on a habit
Only You can Break!"

The room steeped in silence
As Jake sat down,
And for thirty seconds
No one made a sound..

Then a husky voice suggested;
"Why don't we take a Break,"
Then thirty-two prayers left for heaven
Alongside the first one from Jake!

***

"I tell you, that if two of you on earth agree about anything you ask for, it will be done for you by my Father in heaven. For where two or three come together in my name, there am I with them (Matt 18:19,20 NIV)


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Lynda Schultz 02/14/06
The last stanza broke the rhythm, so you might want to rework that one a bit. But this was a wonderful way to handle the theme word and well done.
Lynda Schultz 02/14/06
Oops - and most important of all - the message was excellent.
Jan Ackerson 02/20/06
Congratulations on your win! This is a delightful poem; I have no idea how I missed it before now. Excellent way to use the topic, and it takes great skill to take your readers from a smile to a lump in the throat in the space of one poem. Good job!
Marilyn Schnepp 02/20/06
I am so shocked! I was actually embarrassed by my entry...as I thought it was rather mundane and the last stanza was rhymed altogether differently than the rest. Shock, Shock, SHock. I still can't believe it. You've made my day! I thank you all for your encouragement and kudos. /ms
David Story02/20/06
Very nice. Congratulations!
And the kudos go to you...
God bless.
Gwynn Turner02/20/06
Great poem and versatile use of "break." Congratulations! ~Gwynn
Linda Watson Owen02/21/06
Congratulations, Marilyn, on this witty and poignant poem! It's delightful! (Some of those names look awfully familiar! LOL)
Rachel Rudd02/21/06
Congratulations on your win! It's well-deserved. Your poem captures the reader's attention in a fun style and then hits them with the point! Well-done...I was thinking the same thing about the names as Linda, though...:)
Marilyn Schnepp 02/25/06
Just a few ordinary "names" I picked up along the way...(smile) /ms
Joanne Malley02/26/06
What a unique treat! Nicely done -- and congratulations!
william price08/06/06
Marilyn,
What an excellent, enjoyable poem. i smiled and grinned all the way through. A well deserved win. Very impressive!!!!
God Bless,
bill
(Is it okay to comment after the fact? The poem was new to me.)
Paul Potenza10/05/06
Very powerful. It seems that you have lilved a life that allows you to make studied comments on each of the students responses. I'd like to "rack 'em up" with you and talk.

Pauly