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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Break (02/06/06)

TITLE: PLANET NEKORB
By Diane Johnson
02/09/06


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Wreckage, who was stooped over and breathing profusely, finally calmed his lungs and stood up surveying the land before him. He sneered, then chuckled, as he thought of the brilliant job he had done in leading the eviling army in successfully decimating the town of Nuir. They left nothing unscathed. He thought how exhilarating it always was to hear and feel the crushing beneath his sword and feet. He lived for this! Why, he had not risen to the top rank of Commander of King Destruction's army without earning it! How King Destruction would be pleased.

Now King Destruction was pleased. In fact, he was obsessed with pleasure whenever it came to the desolation of another town on Planet Nekorb. He thrived on breaking the hearts and wills of the pitiful humanites. In fact, he grew stronger every time another town was decimated.

Wreckage and the eviling army returned to the darkened pit located deep in the underground, where he gave his report to King Destruction. Slime began trickling out of both corners of the king's mouth, and he withered out of his throne seat snorting vile vapors of curses. Although he was pleased with his progress, he was nowhere satisfied. In fact, with disgust he realized all too well that he never felt fully satisfied. Why was this? Had he not murdered the only one who could have destroyed his plans? Had he then not discarded the body into a deep darkened pit? Disgusted and furious, he turned and spit upon the unfortunate subject attending to him. Everyone watched as the poor creature was consumed by fire.

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Perpetual Presence had returned to give his surveillance report to his king. "King Galaxy, I have discreetly traveled high above the whole region of Planet Nekorb." He paused, as he had to adjust his eyes from the planet's darkness to the light of glory enveloping the Throne. "And just as you predicted, the humanites are shattered and living in darkness -- the last of their generation is almost destroyed."

King Galaxy replied, "You have done well my Son in giving me a most accurate report. The time of restoration has now come to the humanites. Go in my power and with my light of glory. But Son, you must hurry!"

"Yes, Father. Your will be done!" and at once Perpetual Presence summoned his army to make way for battle. Travelling quickly, he led the army and they entered the planet's hemisphere and penetrated the humanites' atmosphere. Swiftly, the light of glory swallowed up the darkness and flashes of lightning broke through the deep dark cavern where King Destruction and his army dwelled.

Wreckage went for his sword, only to be cut down. Then horror and confusion broke out all throughout the eviling army. They screamed with trepidation as the Perpetual Presence and his army entered the cavern. Then every curse oozed out of King Destruction, and the curses ran to coward in the cavern's corner. They too could not withstand the glory and power that had permeated the atmosphere. And the rancid stench that had set up residence there in deep darkness, bowed down and dissipated to the sweet holy fragrance of Perpetual Presence.

Now above ground the humanites watched in amazement. They had not ever seen the light of day for themselves, but only heard about it from their past ancestors. But this they knew, it was absolutely breathtaking. Yet, to their consternation, they were now able to see themselves in their broken state, and they began to weep uncontrollably.

With his army dismantled, King Destruction could only face Perpetual Presence alone. The height of confusion and hatred shown on his face as he spewed aloud, "How is it that YOU came to be here?"

Perpetual Presence proclaimed, "You left me dead, but I tell you this, I have been fully restored and made alive! Know that I am now present forevermore!" Then, with a swish of his sword, Perpetual Presence struck down King Destruction and he was no more. Then Perpetual Presence ordered the slaying of all the eviling army, and they too were no more.

Then brilliant lights burst forth throughout the land of Planet Nekorb. Perpetual Presence came before all the humanites and proclaimed, "All who are broken and want to be whole, I invite you to come to me!" So all the humanites on Planet Nekorb came before Perpetual Presence.

Planet Nekorb was restored forevermore.


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Lynda Schultz 02/14/06
"Nekorb"? Very clever. Great description and use of the fantasy genre to describe a wonderful truth. Nicely done.
Phyllis Inniss 02/20/06
Fascinating fantasy. I can see this story fitting in well in a children's Bible story book, with illustrations to match. Well done in the way you showed good triumphing over evil.