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02/13/06
How touching! I wonder if you might want to look at this again, and write in more dialog and less description. You obviously have a heart for the elderly, and bless you for it!
02/14/06
Jan demonstrated the passion and persistance that it sometimes takes to reach someone.
02/14/06
I have always admired people who can work with the elderly, be so patient and tender with their childish ways - and this story reiterates this admiration. A Great story and well written. God Bless!
02/18/06
I really loved this piece. I had to read it again to see where the "break" was used, but it was. I noticed at times some of the more beautiful and sincerely written pieces don't get the reviews like the more fluff pieces but that's okay the one that matters saw your heart...a winner in my book.
Jan's example goes beyond the cliche of "tough love" to "supernatural love" - something only the Holy Spirit can achieve. A beautifully written story and an inspiration to us all!! I could picture Nellie and Jan and their interactions very clearly...thanks to your vivid imagery. :-)