The Official Writing Challenge
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This is beautiful. The descriptions read like poetry and the pace and rhthym are restful and meditative. There are one or two little edits I noticed (needn't/need not), but nothing distracting.

'transforming Adam from what he had become to what he once had been.' Stunning phrase. Wondeful stuff and God bless.
02/11/06
Oh Birdie, This is simply amazing. I'm not looking forward to having to compete against you in advanced, where I know you'll be soon! Beautiful crafting of words and ideas.
02/11/06
Beautifully written, and I love your last paragraph. One oops: it's self should be itself. An experience we all should undertake, I think.