The Official Writing Challenge
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02/09/06
Very nice devotional! To increase the impact of your last line, consider a dash between the words "control" and "it's".
02/10/06
This is one all of us aging folks can identify with. The commenter above was right about that last sentence. It'c technically a run-on, but it would be very effective with a dash, even more than making it two sentences.