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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Control (01/30/06)

TITLE: Nothingness
By tim light
01/31/06


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At first there was nothing horrible to be seen. For the Earth, through another's eyes, was empty of all evil.

But the gates of Venus were opened, and Luciel was roaming at this time six miles above the Earth’s atmosphere. He felt once more the excitement to exalt himself. His passion for ascendancy was revived when he saw the innocence and beauty of the Earth.

With his uncanny grey eyes, Luciel gazed down at the blue planet where sun, moon, and stars shine in their season to reveal the world’s eye-catching landscapes and seascapes, its wealth and splendor. He looked at the flock of pigeons in flight and saw the endless picture of the firmament. He observed the colossal blue whales and the intelligent dolphins bobbing up and down on the frolicking waves. He saw the elegant posture of the rainforest on the far horizon. It was this animated planet that he always yearned for.

The sulfur-smelling creature was once a gentle and helpful seraph, flawless, full of life. Yet when darkness possessed his spirit, he became of the same breed as a shadow. His warped mind altered his adorable nature. He became a loathsome life form, a wicked and deadly brute.

The immortal Luciel was not captivated by what he witnessed on the ocean. He swore to himself that dominance defines existence. So he waited in expectancy for the most ferocious beast to come out in the open ground. He wanted a brawl. Suddenly Luciel was surprised to hear lions roaring not very far away. He followed the dreadful roars and was able to watch a pack of zebras set off at a gallop. He was ecstatic. Then he thought of the lions chasing zebras with a new motivation.

“There must be other beings than Venusians,” Luciel said to himself. “I’m going to invade Earth and control the zenith of its territory with vileness. And every Earthling that walks upon its terrain, I will enchain!” He realized that Earth’s creatures must fear him.

Six seconds later, with a knack of teleporting himself, Luciel landed on top of the Empire State Building in New York. It was his plan to hurl mayhem at mortals who do not suspect a thing.

And Luciel voiced, “Let the flying insects spawn freely respiratory microbes in the open atmosphere.” He callously grinned. Then he began to circle the city sky, flying proudly, and spreading lethal viruses in the air.

Rapidly the toxins of bugs fell unto the streets and hundreds of pedestrians which were in the area, died. Vehicles went crashing into each other and hitting bystanders. It was the worst road mishap in the entire American history. Soon the airborne contaminants crossed intercontinental limits. But the evil seraph just ignored it.

Once more Luciel teleported and positioned himself over the Aswan High Dam in Egypt.

He flapped his dark wings and, in a flash, gloom drizzled on the dam’s water. The watercourse became filthy. Many Egyptian families died of the waters because they were poisoned. But he simply cackled like an unruly hyena.

Later on, he snobbishly soared to China. Upon his arrival at the wall "Wan-Li Qang-Qeng", which means "10,000-Li Long Wall", he tempted all their men to seek power, as if they were destined to be gods. He sought to corrupt their minds and hearts with the lure of supremacy, that he might wreak havoc on them too. Then the world’s most populous country with 1.5 billion people was swept away by rage and bloodshed.

What a force of deviousness! What a cruel aspiration! Luciel was not able to see life through the eyes of love.

The outbreak of plague destroyed all rice fields, root crops and fruit-bearing trees. Bitter waters infected the rivers and vast seas. Pride caused men’s ultimate downfall too.

But none of the nations were angry. No one opposed Luciel for his sadistic actions. No one challenged him. Neither wailings nor clamors could be heard. Only stillness was around.

There was, alas, nothing marvelous to be seen, for the Earth was void.

And Luciel felt nothing.

When he rested and slept on the cold moon, a hallowed angel touched him and whispered unto his ear: “For vanity is the origin of all emptiness. O spirit of meaninglessness, you shall be nothing.” And it was so.

Once again Heaven created a beautiful New Earth, for the first earth passed away.


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Birdie Courtright02/07/06
Very creative...I enjoyed the imagery.
Jan Ackerson 02/09/06
The writing and imagery are top-notch. It's a bit problematic if it's read as an end-times scenario, because it doesn't match Biblical interpretation. If it's meant as an allegory, perhaps it should take place on an imaginary planet? You did a great job with this character, I could see the earth through those gray eyes.