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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Control (01/30/06)

TITLE: Mother's Wisdom
By Chelsea Pietsch


“You always want to be in control!”

“Well the bible says that men are the head of women!”

“The bible also says that men are supposed to love their wives as Jesus loves the church. Until you get that part right, don't count on controlling me!” Stacy stormed out of the house. George heard the start of the engine and winced at the crunch of gears. Women shouldn't be able to drive. He shook the thought away and brought his mind back to the argument. He wasn't being unreasonable! Stacy had a history of overspending, and they simply couldn't afford it right now. Giving her a budget was logic – pure and simple. He rolled his eyes in exasperation, straightened his tie, and headed off to work.

Stacy arrived at her mothers with panda eyes and wet cheeks. “I don't understand it mom, he used to buy me things all the time, and now he's barely given me enough for groceries! He's turned into some super control freak - he won't even let me get a new couch!” Her mother patted her head gently but Stacy drew away. “Marriage ruins everything!”

“I know at times it can be tough dear, but don't give up on him! He really loves you.”

Stacy sniffed, “Well it doesn't seem like it.”

Her mother hid a smile. “Now dear, try not to blame him for trying to control the finances. He has a lot of pressure on him to provide for you and your new family,” she patted Stacy's rounded belly. “I'm sure he's not trying to be mean, men just rely on logic and don't think about feelings so much. Why don't you go home and cook him up a really nice dinner. Then let him know how you're feeling – you know it's not really about the money... Thank him for providing everything you do have and he might just feel more inclined to show his love for you then. Everyone likes to be appreciated.”

George's heart sank when he pulled into the driveway. He wouldn't be surprised to find the place dark and his bedroom door locked. His eyes widened in pleasant shock when he saw the candlelit table and smelt the delicious aroma. Stacy came up and hugged him. “I'm sorry honey for getting mad. I know you're just trying to take care of me and I really do appreciate you going to work every day.”

George smiled and was suddenly very glad that he had followed his mother-in-law's advice in the phone message. He pulled out the roses from behind his back and presented them with a flourish, “You're worth it darling.”

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Jan Ackerson 02/09/06
Some familiar character types here--if you re-visit this, consider adding a twist of some sort. The mother is quite wise and charming.
Val Clark02/14/06
A well written story that brought a smile to my face, Chelsea. If you ever expanded this - and it has heaps of potential - you might like to take us on Chelsea's emotional journey as she thinks over her mother's advice, prepares the meal, sees George come home looking like thunder, upping her internal drama until he reveals the flowers. Just a thought. Yeggy