The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/06
I had to read through this twice because it was very choppy and jumped a lot making it very hard to follow. A few words were missing their "ed" endings and some words were missing. I am glad for you that you had the revelation to give everything to God.
02/09/06
A heartfelt testimony--Consider reading it slowly, aloud, to catch the awkward sentences and missed suffixes. This would be great for a grief support group to hear, or even an autistic support group. Blessings on your family...
A lovely testimony - good advice on structure has already been offered, but it does not distract from the heart of the piece. God bless.