The Official Writing Challenge
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01/31/06
I didn't really understand the sobbing friend's problem; however, the lady of the house proved to be a real friend in need; thanks for sharing this slice of life...and nicely told in this story. God Bless.
02/01/06
I would like to see this developed into at least a short story. That would give you time to develop your characters and the plot instead of having to squash so much into seven hundred and fifty words. I don't think you need to put in the "sobs". Just saying, after she speaks something like: "she sobbed" is enough.This has great potential. Keep writing.