The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/06
Your fourth stanza is particularly lovely. The short lines make for a "choppy" read--I wonder how it would read differently if some of the lines were combined to longer ones? Something to try next time, perhaps. I like your exhortation to "seek divinity". Very nice.
01/25/06
My "cup of tea" in poetry is the old fashioned type poem composed of perfect rhthmic phrases; however, this is lyrical, has great wisdom, great creativity, and a wonderful take on "start"; I actually enjoyed this "offbeat brand of tea" (smile) and, I Liked it just as it is! Very well done!
I have read this through a few times now - as another lover of 'old school' poetry, the short sentances took a little adjusting too. But, having adjusted, I have to say I really like this. The spark of inspiration has been carried through beautifully: the last stanza is wonderful. God bless.
01/26/06
Very creative. I like the poem as is. We can't always stick to the old format; we must welcome change. Your ideas in this poem are very sound.