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01/23/06
The poetic flow isn't there - but the message IS! And I loved the last verse - supurb! An excellent "take" on Start...starting over and beginning again. Very well done.
01/23/06
Good message--but could use a little better flow. Best wishes with this poem.
01/24/06
Your last stanza is absolutely lovely. To improve your "flow", try reading your poem aloud, counting syllables in each line. They should be the same, or nearly so, with a pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables. Keep it up--you have great promise here.
As Jan said, a great deal of poetic promise here and the excellent adivce on how to structure this has already been provided. The message and the feeling cannot be faulted and I really liked the last stanza. God bless.
01/26/06
I like the poem; should a poem always flow? Your feelings came through loud and clear. That's good.
I like it. Wonderful message!
01/27/06
A nice message that even when we think we can't start over, God is right there to help us. Well done!