The Official Writing Challenge
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01/19/06
A beautiful story - beautifully told. A creative angle pulled off well. Very GOOD!
I love once upon a time stories! I think it had a nice flow. I wished for a little something more for the end. Not sure what lol. Just something more. Otherwise great!!!
01/20/06
A sweet story that makes a great outline for a much longer piece. An interesting expose on the bible verses.
01/20/06
This read like a fairy tale. Enough darkness to make the light, brighter -nicely done.
01/20/06
Thank you for this intimate look at growing up in a less-than-happy home. Careful of punctuation (possessives)--only because it's a little distracting. Your tie-in of the emotional consequence (as an adult) and of the scriptures was very interesting. Nice job!
01/21/06
I was concerned after "Once apon a time" but you pulled it off. A strong message told with a loving style. Kind of a sad story throughout ... but she finally found a home!
01/22/06
Kind of poignant - sad but lovely. Your children's story approach was simple and refreshing. Well done.