The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/06
Very nice story, but "Reader unfriendly"; by that, I mean it needs to be broken down somewhat into more paragraphs to make it an easier read for the Reader. Otherwise, it was well written with a message for all. Thank you for sharing.
01/19/06
Going home means different places to different people, but wherever it is, God is there. Thanks for the eye opening story!
The material things don't really matter. You've shown that clearly and Ciarra came to realize that she wasted her life on superficials. A very good message you spelt out here. Thanks for sharing.
A very clear message that no amount of material possesions can fill the soul. The paragraphs were a little dense, but otherwise a strongly told piece. God bless.