The Official Writing Challenge
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01/09/06
Kept my interest throughout. Hopefully the Janitor is an honest man. Fascinating story, and well written. I liked it.
01/09/06
Good imaginative story telling, some typos throughout but holds the reader interest.
01/10/06
I love this story! What a wonderful story of God's provision and His pursuit of us! The ending was fantastic...
01/10/06
This was a fascinating story with its 'coincidences'.
I had a question at the end about the money Dick stuffed under the pew. He left without it, right? But surely Richard the cleric would not just take the discovered money, thinking ahead, without trying to find the rightful owner. In a way, that would be stealing, too.
Excellent beginning, and like I said, the coincidences were uncanny.
Great job...Hopefully, the first Dick will seek the Lord. Your story held my attention the whole time.
01/11/06
Well-written and exciting. Watch for misspellings: furor and thief caught my eye. The pacing was excellent here, with a storyteller's ear.