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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: The Struggle
By T. F. Chezum
01/07/06


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Hypnotized by the world's spell
It's darkness where I choose to dwell
A prison I know all too well
I wish I could escape this cell

In a world where I can't cope
I keep on searching for some hope
But all I do is blindly grope
I can't escape this binding rope

My mind is caught in a debate
And I am tempted by the bait
The wage of sin is far too great
But I'm afraid it is too late
My destiny is carved in slate
I fear I won't escape this fate

In this prison I will stay
Unless I can find the way
I feel I'm hunted like some prey
By the beast I can't obey
So I hide in my dismay
While I watch my life decay
I must try to escape this fray

My spirit has not come of age
The writers will not turn the page
So I stay standing on the stage
As I cry out in my rage
I seek the wisdom of the sage
Please help me escape this cage

My soul is void it has no shape
Brutalized by Satan's rape
I'm burdened by life's heavy cape
I pray that one day I'll escape


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Marilyn Schnepp 01/09/06
I can empathize with "The Struggle", as I worked behind steel bars for 20 years - and know firsthand about the tears behind those smiling faces! I am wondering if this is fiction or reality - but it sounds so real! Your poetry strikes deeply into the heart and soul of anybody who does time within those unescapable grey walls. You did a fantastic job - different, perhaps - but very well done! Keep writing! Thank you for sharing!
Jan Ackerson 01/09/06
A well-written poem with a unique rhyme scheme and nearly perfect meter. Your prison metaphor is very compelling. Thanks for this excellent entry!
Dara Sorensen01/12/06
I love the rhyming and the imagery!
Maxx .01/12/06
I happen to know that the author of this piece has spent many a year behind bars ,,, and he captured it well. .........ok, ok.. I'm kidding! I'm sure the author hasn't spent much time in prison at all .... I mean none at all!.......

Seriously, the symbolism used here is very strong. I appreciate the feel of weight and confinement in the writing. There's power here.
Linda Watson Owen01/14/06
At first the intense repetition of the rhyming bothered me, but I see the overall effect fits well with the theme. The rhyme is unescapable as is the prison. Really good job!!


   
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