The Official Writing Challenge
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05/13/16
Excellent. I enjoyed it a lot. I just suggest white space between the paragraphs.
05/14/16
Truly enjoyed this well written entry, great message too!

Blessings~
05/17/16
Very dramatic story with strong content, which needs paragraph breaks for us to travel through it with you.
05/18/16
Well written story with good dialogue. My only suggestion would be to double space between the paragraphs for easier reading.

You have a knack for spinning a good yarn, and I look forward to reading more.
05/19/16
Kathleen, I was surprised your story didn't place.