The Official Writing Challenge
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At first I didn't know you were talking about Joseph..You told it from his version..Nice job.
01/10/06
A little trouble with the language here and there, but a very interesting angle to work from.
01/15/06
I began to suspect who the narrator was halfway through the first paragraph.
Reread before submission for grammatical errors (example: "A land from which my fore-fathers escaped from"-second 'from shouldn't be there), typos ("my promised to her. Not because I was being stubborned"), incorrect spellings ('judgment', not judgement').
Seeing the moves they have to make from Joseph's perspective was good.
Don't know if the final paragraph was even necessary because of the hints you gave along the way.
Enjoyed reading this!