The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a beautiful and touching story. Thank you for sharing it.
12/13/05
I think this was very, very well written. A enjoyable read!:)
12/13/05
Josephine's brother saved her life once, and lost his. The minister came to the Tree House and she was saved again by his kindness - and also learned from him that Jesus also died to save her. You have put it all together nicely in the words of this story. God bless.
12/14/05
Intriguing title. This story held my interest all the way to the end, and even though I expected the ending, it was still well-worded. Wonderful message!
Just a few punctuation and wording glitches: First sentence is missing an 'of'. Second sentence needs a comma between are and Mom. Paragraph 9: did you mean a "gnarled finger" and "She shuddered...?" First paragraph after the memory section: comma between "how God works" and "children".
This is such a wonderful story that there are few things to suggest. Good writing! Great message!
12/14/05
What a unique way to write about "trees!"

The dialog rang true throughout--until the very last paragraph, when it became somewhat stilted. (And it should have been "his children and I...").

I was really drawn in to this story; the falshback was beautifully done.