The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this. The rhythm and rhyme would flow better if this were separated into stanzas. Thanks for sharing!
I really liked this. The flow was a bit awkward, but the idea was very unique, so I looked past the rythym a bit. This will be a great poem once the flow is smoothed out. Good job!
I really like this. Thanks for your creativitiy.
12/14/05
Well done--good meter and rhyme. Punctuation may help the flow and readability.

Good job at writing such an extended metaphor quite capably.
Lovely!
12/16/05
This was beautiful! The entire last half of the poem gave me shivers as the tree tried to understand. Some very powerful phrases in those last eleven lines! Good job!