The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this. The rhythm and rhyme would flow better if this were separated into stanzas. Thanks for sharing!
I really liked this. The flow was a bit awkward, but the idea was very unique, so I looked past the rythym a bit. This will be a great poem once the flow is smoothed out. Good job!
I really like this. Thanks for your creativitiy.
Well done--good meter and rhyme. Punctuation may help the flow and readability.

Good job at writing such an extended metaphor quite capably.
This was beautiful! The entire last half of the poem gave me shivers as the tree tried to understand. Some very powerful phrases in those last eleven lines! Good job!