The Official Writing Challenge
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07/09/15
I enjoyed the conversational voice you used to talk to your reader.
A couple of technical critiques:
- Space down a line between your paragraphs to make them more distinct and easier to read.
- "OK.," -- I think the punctuation on that should be different
- "I never ate" -- should be "I have never eaten"
- Watch out for sentence fragments (A fun tourist trap)

Overall, it makes me want to visit these places!
07/10/15
An invitation to Maine that lures the reader making us want to vacation there for sure!

I enjoyed your story. Thanks.

God bless~
07/10/15
This was an enjoyable road trip up the Maine coast. Your descriptions brought back vivid memories of familiar sights and stops. I was a little confused by the narration style; I couldn't decide if it was a one way conversation, a "homey" brochure, or a travel blog post. Overall, a good snapshot of Maine. I can't wait to go back!
07/14/15
I felt like I was back in Maine. I enjoyed your story!