The Official Writing Challenge
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Quite a few big words in there that I had to look up! LOL The title is very befitting. This reminds me very much of Ecclesiastes. Perhaps you could spread it out into a few paragraphs instead of one lump sum.
12/07/05
Break it into 3 or 4 paragraphs, and this will be a nice, nostalgic piece. I was a bit confused, though--you start with nosegays and cotillions, then talk about longing to enjoy boyish moments. The first sentence pegged you as a girl, in my mind.
12/09/05
This does indeed sound like Solomon of old; and wise words they are, too. It would be so much better had you spaced it into paragraphs so that each thought would have more impact. Some words over my head...but then that's not YOUR problem...it's MINE. Smile.