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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Spring (as in the season) (11/28/05)

TITLE: By the Gardener
By Michael Pagano
11/29/05


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A decision has been made
To plant a garden in this ground
This oblate spheroid hung in space
Mostly safe and sound

The Gardener spreads the seed
The soil shall take it in
Through warmth and care of time
Life will soon begin

The stage has been set
For times greatest story
The seed makes a decision
And is void of heavenís glory

The sun now scorches
The air has become thick
The flowers now have thorns
And the thorns do prick

The roots now deepen
To support life above
The petals unfold their beauty
But the stem will show what itís made of

Through season after season
Through winter and through storm
The weeds do choke our life
And we happily go along

Through choice this has come
A law set in motion
Only saved by Love
As the all consuming ocean

Another Seed is planted
Foreseen through time and space
That through this vine we would be grafted
Into the Gardenerís grace


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Marilyn Schnepp 12/06/05
As a Writer, I see the brilliant idea between the lines; as a Critiquer, I look for perfect rhythm that flows...which this poem does have in some verses, but not in all. Perhaps"free verse" type poetry might be more your cup of tea in this instance. A beautiful idea, however - from a creative mind.
Linda Watson Owen12/06/05
Lovely concept for this enjoyable poem!
Jan Ackerson 12/07/05
A little work on meter and rhythm would really polish up this gem!
Sandra Petersen 12/08/05
You have meditations here that are worth pondering. The rhythm needs a little work, but I agree that this could be a gem!
Alexandra Wilkin12/09/05
I agree that the rhthym and meter are a little awkward in places but the imagry was excellent. God bless.